Sunday, April 18, 2010

O My Love

O my love
You're my mind, body & soul!
Let's blossom as flowers in the garden of love

O my love
When you dance in the rain, I go dry
You flow in my veins & you are my heart beat

O my love
Shall we hire the moon for us to live in it?
We are united like water and land

I asked my heart "Who am I"
It replied that I'm yours.

[Dedicated to a special person]


Anonymous said...

hmmm... good one.. but mehvish writes better than u!!! :D but seriously good one
hope the rite person reads it ;)


Rafaa Dalvi aka Mr.Charismatic said...

Haha mehvash is a gal n shez been writin since her skool days...

Rafaa Dalvi aka Mr.Charismatic said...

oh i fuhgt to thank u :P

Anonymous said...

kahan se chaapa??...neway its gud...

Anonymous said...

yes rafa.
well, you've hardly expressed anything here.
i didn't find a core thought behind you writing this. the last stanza took me few minutes to realise what you meant. 'it replied that i'm yours' here 'yours' isnt you, its the person you've written for. right?
avoid such things when it creates pun.

and is this your first poem?

Rafaa Dalvi aka Mr.Charismatic said...


haha...finally a critic...I just felt lyk xpressin my feelings...yup u got it ryt 'yours' is da person fer which I've written this

Actually I've written 3 poems fer mothers day b4 penning down this one ;)

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