O my love
You're my mind, body & soul!
Let's blossom as flowers in the garden of love
O my love
When you dance in the rain, I go dry
You flow in my veins & you are my heart beat
O my love
Shall we hire the moon for us to live in it?
We are united like water and land
I asked my heart "Who am I"
It replied that I'm yours.
[Dedicated to a special person]
You're my mind, body & soul!
Let's blossom as flowers in the garden of love
O my love
When you dance in the rain, I go dry
You flow in my veins & you are my heart beat
O my love
Shall we hire the moon for us to live in it?
We are united like water and land
I asked my heart "Who am I"
It replied that I'm yours.
[Dedicated to a special person]
6 comments:
hmmm... good one.. but mehvish writes better than u!!! :D but seriously good one
hope the rite person reads it ;)
praveen
Haha mehvash is a gal n shez been writin since her skool days...
oh i fuhgt to thank u :P
kahan se chaapa??...neway its gud...
-nishith
yes rafa.
well, you've hardly expressed anything here.
i didn't find a core thought behind you writing this. the last stanza took me few minutes to realise what you meant. 'it replied that i'm yours' here 'yours' isnt you, its the person you've written for. right?
avoid such things when it creates pun.
and is this your first poem?
@nishith
xD
@zoya
haha...finally a critic...I just felt lyk xpressin my feelings...yup u got it ryt 'yours' is da person fer which I've written this
Actually I've written 3 poems fer mothers day b4 penning down this one ;)
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